“Hello, hello,” I said impatiently into the phone. I heard cries and sobs. I pulled the phone away from my ear to check the caller ID. It was my mom. My heart pounded, and my breath quickened as I realized those heart-wrenching sounds were coming from her.
I screamed into the phone, “Mom, I can’t understand you. Calm down.” My dread grew as her voice, punctuated with sobs, came across the line. “Your dad… the doctor just called.” I was frantic as she spoke. I thought she was going to tell me my dad was dead. Her crying made it difficult to understand her words.
“Mom, what? I can’t understand you.” My voice sharpened, trying to snap her out of it. “What’s wrong?” I glanced at my husband. He looked at me, the wrinkles around his eyes forming a spiderweb as he narrowed them, his eyebrows raised, silently asking what was going on. I shrugged my shoulders.
Finally, Mom’s voice broke through. “Your dad has cancer.”
I couldn’t answer her. I couldn’t offer her any comfort. My voice locked. I tried to speak, but no sound came out. Tears inched down my face. It seemed like an eternity before I could respond. Her cries created a background noise of chaos in my mind.
“Mom, what did the doctor say? Did he give a timeframe? Did he say what stage the cancer was in?” My questions shot like bullets from a six-shooter in a standoff. My mom didn’t have the answers. She couldn’t talk. Reluctantly, I disconnected the call.
Duty dictated my next steps. I told my husband, then called my children. Automatically, I continued my work. My mind searched for the earliest memory I had of my dad, but I found nothing. He had been there when I was a child. I knew because I remembered the discipline. I remembered family dinners at the supper table. I remembered long rides to church. I remembered being grounded a lot, mostly for grades that were below B’s. I remembered sitting on the opposite side of the back seat from him in the car so he couldn’t swat me. I remembered his stern looks from the platform at church when I was talking, followed by the dread of waiting to be reprimanded on the way home. But mostly, I didn’t remember.
The floorboard creaked. I called out, “I’m awake,” not wanting my mom to turn on the light before my eyes adjusted.
“Okay, time to get up and get ready for school,” she said.
I lay in bed a few seconds longer, listening as the car started. My bedroom was right next to the carport, so I heard the car backing out, the gravel crunching beneath the tires, and then silence. I knew my dad had left for work. It was time to get up.
Mom usually fixed oatmeal and toast for breakfast. Breakfast varied little. During the cold months, we had oatmeal. When summer came, we had Corn Flakes. Once in a while, like that day, we had cinnamon toast. Mom’s cinnamon toast was good. She placed white bread in the toaster. Once it popped out, she buttered it quickly, then sprinkled a mix of cinnamon and sugar over the melting butter. She always fixed us two pieces.
After school, my mom made us sit at the kitchen table to do our homework while she cooked supper. If we finished our homework, we could go outside and play. Mom didn’t serve supper until Dad got home. Once he arrived, playtime was over, and we all sat down at the table to eat. He went straight to the kitchen sink, washing his hands and arms up to his elbows, scrubbing away the errant grease from the semis he had worked on during the day.
After washing, he sat at the kitchen table. We all had our own places. Dad sat at the head, my sister at the opposite end, and Mom and I on the sides. I didn’t like it when Dad fixed my plate. He piled on too much food, and we were supposed to eat everything on our plate—whether we liked it or not.
“Eat everything on your plate before you get up,” he said.
I always wondered if finishing early meant I could leave the table. But I never did—there was too much food. Instead, I waited until he left so Mom could scrape off the extra. It was our secret.
After supper, Dad watched television in the living room while my sister and I took our baths. Once we were done, we went into the living room to tell Dad goodnight. I didn’t remember kissing him goodnight, just saying the words. His eyes never left the television as he responded.
When I was sixteen, Dad finally let me use the riding lawn mower. I felt so grown-up, cruising across the yard, the scent of fresh-cut grass thick in the air. The only problem? I wasn’t heavy enough, and every time I hit a hole, the mower would stop. No matter how much I wiggled, rocked, or bounced in the seat, it wouldn’t budge. Eventually, Dad would come out, shake his head, and push me forward so I could keep going.
The summer before my senior year, we moved to DeQueen, Arkansas. Unlike our old home, snow was rare, and we hadn’t seen a good snowfall since moving. That night, my sisters and I went to bed buzzing with excitement, hoping the weatherman’s snow prediction would come true, and for once, he didn’t fail us. I was still warm in bed when Dad yanked off my covers and tossed me over his shoulder like a sack of potatoes. Before I could protest, he carried me outside and dumped me straight into the snow. I shrieked, the cold jolting against my skin. He just laughed, standing over me with that playful, mischievous grin. It was all in fun, but I never became a fan of being thrown into the snow!
Before we moved, weekends were different. Dad didn’t go to work, and we didn’t have school. We wanted to sleep late, but that was never allowed.
“Rise and shine,” he said, flipping on the overhead light.
I burrowed into the covers, shielding my eyes. He started singing, “Time to get up in the morning…” as he yanked the blankets off the bed. Reluctantly, I mumbled, “Okay, I’m coming.”
Saturday mornings varied by season. In winter, we worked on the woodpile. In summer, we tended the garden. I wasn’t a fan of either. That day was wood-chopping day. Dad warmed up the truck, and we headed to Hobbs Hill, where his childhood home stood and where we always chopped wood.
Dad chopped, and halfway through the morning, he shed his jacket. We saw his big muscles, and sometimes he flexed them for us. Neither my sister nor I had muscles.
“That’s because I chop the wood, and you only stack it,” Dad said.
Afterward, we drove home and unloaded the truck. Then, we had free time. Dad worked around the house while my sister and I played, rode bikes, or read until dark. Supper was late on Saturdays, but it was the same as every other night.
I hoped Mom fixed my plate.
Maybe I did remember—just not in the way I expected.
Originally written 2015. Revised 2025
This short story hit home to me because my mother in-law passed of cancer in 2014. I remember the call I received clear as day. The only difference between this call and our call was there was no telling anyone else. Everything happened so quickly. She was notified, got admitted into the hospital, transferred to Houston, then came back to the hospital here, all within 4 months. She passed not long after that. There is a lot of vivid description in the daily memories remembered. I do not have those anymore. I guess through time those small things have faded. I feel like this is a good story, due to being able to visualize each description that is spoken about the memories. I wish I could remember like this.
i like the story because it give you what a family is acutely suppose to be like and not everyone go off and do something different. I think more people should sit at a table as a family and not eat in front of the TV or in rooms but since technology is getting more advance i believe this is going to be something only older folks do and younger generation are not going know the feeling of a family dinner. i know as a kid we really didn’t sit around a table as a family only on holidays and now it like my family does other things for holidays and not come together anymore your story give enough details to were i can relate and not a lot of none sense that doesn’t need to be in it
This story was very easy to follow. I assume that many would have the same reaction after finding out that a loved one has cancer. Words disappear and silence breaks in. Words or actions can never take away that fact of the cancer. It seems that the story goes back in time to when the daughter is a kid telling the few memories that she can remember from being a child. The situation and the memories were very well worded and easy to follow. It stated the situation well as if it were actually happening. this is a very good story.
Alysa, Thank you. Why is it easy to follow? What factors make the reader invest in the story, or not?
The story starts off so strong that it grabs your attention immediately. I know it must have been hard for her mother finding out her husband had cancer. I like how the story goes from her trying to remember into her actually remembering. I think that’s how it actually happens, you try to remember things but you cant it just happens
I enjoyed this story and it hit home for me because we had a scare not too long ago that dealt with my mom having cancer. She had a ton of tests done and they finally found out it wasn’t cancer, but it eventually could become that way. In your story, I loved how as soon as you found out your dad had cancer that you went straight to all the memories you had with him. Memories are important because it is nice to remember all the good times that you have had with people. They really good to sit and think about when something bad happens, because for a moment in time you are able to just sit there and think about nothing but happy times. It gets you out of the sadness mood, if only for a little while. It also talked about how a family is suppose to live, and I loved that.
I enjoy the story because my grandmother had cancer. My mom broke down when she heard the news. She went through chemotherapy for a whole summer. My mom was real sad about the situation even though she denied it, yet she still cooked on time and did what she had to do everyday for us a family. I also like how you started off with a good hook. It got my attention immediately.
Opening is very catching, you can picture this because it is so common and relatable, even with me. I like how the narrator goes through a series of events to try and recapture everything. Sometimes memories come on naturally, as they can be hard to force, especially under stressful circumstances.
The description of the author’s mother’s raw emotion used in the introduction to this story, was very effective in grabbing my attention and drawing me into the story. The author does an excellent job of illustrating that, when faced with immortality, memories that have the biggest impact in our lives do not have to be grand, elaborate gestures. The mundane, everyday routine that we take for granted can become our most treasured memories. As a young girl, I would ride on my dad’s lap, as he mowed our lawn. He and I did lots of memorable things when I was growing up, but the memory of riding with him on that lawnmower will be a cherished memory that will hold strong long after that old lawn mower is a rusty pile of metal.
The story could have benefited from a deeper insight into the author’s emotion.
The beginning of the story does a good job of making you feel the emotions of the main character. Describing the sounds she heard from her mom making it clear how heart wrenching the situation was forced you to feel that anxiety she felt as she was trying to find out what was going on. Once she hears the news she immediately starts trying to get answers, not taking a moment to even process what she just heard. This is a great illustration of human nature and the drive one feels to do everything in their power to prevent the death of a loved one and refusing to consider it as a possibility. This makes the story feel very real giving you a strong desire to keep reading.
I liked the point of the story, her remembering the past and the good times spent with her father. I really didn’t get a great sense of her emotions once she started remembering though. The stories of her childhood were told perfectly but I didn’t feel like they were related to the current situation she was dealing with and really didn’t know how she was felt about her dad at the end of the story. Overall it was a great story with realistic details that made it very interesting but a little more details about the characters emotions toward the end would have kept me a bit more interested.
Great job on this one though.
Wow!! I absolutely love this story. My dad passed away with cancer about 12 years ago and I can remember wanting to hold on to everything I could remember about him. This was a great story. Thanks !!
Certain traumatic events jog our memories back to childhood. It is amazing how certain events or routines are associated with events that remind us of yesterday. They are not recalled right away but eventually details emerge. Well written. It is easy for the reader to relate to memories when the mind is free flowing and not full of responsibilities or distractions. We allow ourselves to stop the present from time to time and remember moments that will not occur again in our lifetimes. This is what shapes are souls and who we are present day. Reminiscence is a good thing.
This story was very easy to follow because you can see her in your head just in shock about her dad and instantly going back to being a kid and what it was like with her father around. All the little corks about having to eat all the food on their places and how he would wake them on saturday even though they wanted to sleep in. Also how he would chop the wood and they would stack it. She was emerged in reminiscing and maybe even sad some that soon that might be over. She won’t ever get that time back and soon she might not ever get to have anymore moments with her father. She’ll only have her memories.
I really love the last line ” Maybe, I do remember.” I like it because it’s almost like you wrote the story to tell yourself, so that you could remember him. This story reflects the power of writing, and the things that just automatically flow out of our pencils, or keyboards when we can’t seem to organize our thoughts. I like it because it’s emotional and vivid. Maybe describing the house, paint color,carpet, temperature in your house would make us really feel like we were at home with you.